- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 12:53, 29 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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- ... that in 930, the Qarmatians sacked Mecca, massacred the Hajj pilgrims, plundered the Kaaba, and carried off the Black Stone to their homeland in Bahrayn? Source: Rezazadeh Langaroodi 2015: "Abū Ṭāhir attacked Mecca and massacred the pilgrims in the streets, in the precincts of the Kaʿba and even inside the Kaʿba itself...He dislodged the Black Stone"
Created by Cplakidas (talk). Self-nominated at 13:24, 11 June 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Sack of Mecca (930); consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]
The article met the criteria through many extensions. In addition, it is judged that it meets the appropriate reference criteria by referring to officially published books. The proposed hook also provides sufficient attention. Religious disputes have always attracted the attention of many people.Kloyan.L (talk) 07:54, 12 June 2023 (UTC)
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- This review is transcluded from Talk:Sack of Mecca/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Nominator: Cplakidas (talk · contribs)
Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 22:19, 25 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Review
- I am happy to review this. Bruxton (talk) 22:19, 25 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
- Y Regarding your use of dashes 927-928 consider using "927–928"
- AFAICT it is already an endash? Constantine ✍ 19:49, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- I put them in the lead. Bruxton (talk) 21:13, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y "winter 929/930" consider "929–930"
- Changed. Constantine ✍ 19:49, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y the lead says "The city was plundered for eight to eleven days," the body says "The Qarmatians continued their killing and plundering for eight or eleven days". Can we line them up by using the language of the lead?
- Done. Constantine ✍ 19:49, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Grammar
Lead
- Y "all its decorations and relics taken away" consider "were" taken away
- Done. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y "This act meant a complete break between the Qarmatians and the Islamic world" maybe "meant" is the wrong word here. The act "caused" or some similar?
- Replaced with 'was tantamount to'. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Motives for the attack
- Y "On the other hand, as the historian Heinz Halm points out" consider replacing the colloquial "On the other hand"
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Abu Tahir and the war with the Abbasids
- Y "Even the city's iron gates were dismantled and taken back to Bahrayn" consider using some other set up instead of "even" or just say "The city's iron gates were dismantled and taken back to Bahrayn"
- I have added something before 'even', but I don't think removing it improves anything... Taking the gates of a sacked city with you is a fairly unusual move and is remarkable as such. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- ? "Under the leadership of the barely 16-year-old Abu Tahir" suggest removing barely
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y "Furthermore, factional rivalries in the Abbasid court" "furthermore" is a WP:WTW and should be remove
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y "but the authorities nevertheless paid a hefty sum" suggest removing nevertheless
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Massacre of the pilgrims and plundering of the city
- Y "One report, obviously exaggerated, suggests" do we know why it is obviously exaggerated?
- This comes from the cited source, I have rephrased accordingly. Most medieval reports have a tendency to inflate casualties, booty, size of enemy armies, etc. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Motives for the attack
- Y "who were considered as usurpers by the" I think we can remove the word "as"
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Aftermath
- Y "Nevertheless, the affair of the false Mahdi tarnished the prestige of Abu Tahir" consider removing nevertheless
- Removed. Constantine ✍ 19:56, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Citations
- Y Earwig has no matches, so individual sources will be checked.
- ? You should consider using {{r|Johnson|p=51}} citation style - some of your citations give a page range of ten pages
- I don't understand why that would be required. Where more than one or two pages are referenced, it is because the text summarizes these pages. I also cannot find a range of ten pages anywhere. Constantine ✍ 20:00, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Y Origins of the Qarmatians of Bahrayn section - only one source is accessible here. AGF
- ? Abu Tahir and the war with the Abbasids section all sources are offline
- Not done I am not able to access citations throughout. I wonder if you might email me some screen shots of sources so that I can spot check? @Cplakidas: After you address the items I will do more checks. Bruxton (talk) 18:23, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Bruxton: Certainly I can email you some photos of sources; which ones do you require? Constantine ✍ 20:00, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cplakidas: pick at least one citation from each section. Bruxton (talk) 20:03, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Bruxton: I assume you want me to focus on Halm and Daftary, since these sources are offline; it will likely take a couple of days. Constantine ✍ 20:14, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cplakidas: do your best - I was hoping to wrap this up by Sunday. Bruxton (talk) 20:16, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Bruxton: email has been sent. Constantine ✍ 10:20, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you. I do not speak or read German so I have to AGF on the Halm source. The Isma'ilis I was able to spot check several citations to see that they line up. Bruxton (talk) 14:18, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Images
- Y Three images appear in the article and they are correctly licensed and free. Bruxton (talk) 15:59, 26 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The article met the criteria through many extensions. In addition, it is judged that it meets the appropriate reference criteria by referring to officially published books. The proposed hook also provides sufficient attention. Religious disputes have always attracted the attention of many people.Kloyan.L (talk) 07:54, 12 June 2023 (UTC)
Regarding your use of dashes 927-928 consider using "927–928"
Not done I am not able to access citations throughout. I wonder if you might email me some screen shots of sources so that I can spot check? @Cplakidas: After you address the items I will do more checks. Bruxton (talk) 18:23, 29 March 2024 (UTC)