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Nominator: PrinceArchelaus (talk · contribs) 00:51, 10 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Reviewer: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 03:26, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I will be reviewing this, will share the comments shortly! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 03:26, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @PrinceArchelaus Done with my comments! I am putting it on hold for the time being while they are addressed. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 05:38, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @PrinceArchelaus I can see that you are addressing the comments. Please mark a
Y against the comment if you have addressed it, so that it can be tracked easily. Ping me once you are done. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 08:42, 3 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]- @Magentic Manifestations: I'm done with the revisions. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 20:19, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @PrinceArchelaus There were a few edits which I have made. It is good to go now. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 08:57, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
MoS and Prose
- It is a good practice to move all the citations to the body of the article as per MOS:CITELEAD as the career part is an extract from the bodyw ith the same citations
- layout artist, and storyboard artist at Walt Disney Animation Studios can be re-worded to layout artist, and storyboard artist, who worked at Walt Disney Animation Studios for 44 years
- Walt Disney Animation Studios for 44 years confused here; Later part says that he joined WED in 1950s, but the length mentioned here seems contiguous (1933-78). As he worked for sometime post retirement as well, it would be better to put it as Walt Disney Company for more than 44 years.
- Born in Seattle, Washington, Anderson Seattle and Washington can be linked
- joining Walt Disney Productions in 1934. Inconsistency; Probably better to introduce WDAS here rather than a different name
- He worked as an inbetweener and was promoted to an animator. What is an inbetweener (link it!). When did he work and when was he promoted? If no time period is available, reword to He initially worked as an inbetweener and was later promoted to an animator.
- His first major assignment was the Silly Symphonies short Three Orphan Kittens (1935) Expand short to short film or short animation film
- During the 1950s, Anderson joined WED Enterprises, Why short-form here and shouldn't it be WDI? As it is a WD company, it will be better to put it as, During the 1950s, Anderson worked for Walt Disney Imagineering (WDI), where he designed...
- It wasn't called Walt Disney Imagineering until several decades later. I can accommodate the change to reflect its contemporary branding. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- introduced the Xerography technique xero no caps
- but he rejoined WED Enterprises a year later use the same abbreviation defined previously
Early life
- Born in Seattle, Washington, Anderson Seattle and Washington can be linked
- On a ship back to the United States, his father died from malaria when he was ten, leaving their family destitute. reword to While sailing back to the United States in 1919, his father died from malaria, leaving the family destitute.
- Anderson's mother sent him to live with his uncle who abused him, forcing him to run away and lived in the woods. reword to abused him, which forced him to run away and to live in the woods.
- which he claimed "no one had won west of the Mississippi before." move to indirect which he claimed that no one west of the Mississippi had obtained it before. as direct is not really needed here and bit unclear as to what is being meant
- Re-organize first section as Early life and education and second section as career with other sub-headings
1933–1942: the Silly Symphonies, Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs, the Golden Age of Animation
- What does the "Golden Age of Animation" signify? (as there is no mention of it anywhere.)
- Fine. I'll remove it and insert Fantasia. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Due to a scarcity in architectural jobs, Anderson was hired for a six-week position as a set designer for Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer on The Painted Veil Abbreviate MGM as it is referenced as such later + tweak to designer for Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer, where he worked on...
- Sure. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- returned to the studio and displayed expand studio to Walt Disney as the previous paragraph talks about both MGM and WD
- in the Inbetween Department link inbetween, no caps for inbetween and department
- I'll make the wikilink. I'll decapitalized inbetween department. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- Ink and Paint department, employed there for three years until she became pregnant with her first daughter. no caps for ink and paint + with their daughter
- Nope. Ink and Paint should be capitalized. Disney Animation's own website does the same. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- Anderson began working as an inbetweener working in a large room "doing various fill-in scenes in various pictures" with other junior animators, including reword to Anderson began working as an inbetweener doing fill-in scenes for various films with other junior animators including...
- first projects were the Silly Symphonies shorts expand shorts
- His first projects were the Silly Symphonies shorts, including The Goddess of Spring (1934) and Three Little Wolves (1936), and Mickey's Polo Team (1936). Disney admired Anderson's skill in perspective drawing and selected him to animate on the Silly Symphonies short Three Orphan Kittens (1935) This seems to be the transition from his role as an inbetweener to an animator (as summarized in the lead as well). If he made the transition during the TOK in 1935, did he go back to work as an inbetweener for the two films in 1936?
- Layout Department, headed by no caps
- Feeling motivated by Disney's performance, Anderson was assigned with special effects Who was felt motivated and who assigned Anderson to the dept. If Anderson was motivated, it should rather be Feeling motivated by Disney's performance, Anderson worked with special effects
- The sentence is pretty clear Anderson was the one feeling motivated. While he was motivated, Walt Disney was the one who assigned his production crew their roles. I can rewrite it to indicate that. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- Disney was pleased with the results and ordered another test of the dwarfs' cottage and Snow White As the first test was on a peddler women i the forest, "another" here is not required as it is a different scene. Disney was pleased with the results and ordered further animation tests of Snow White and the dwarfs' cottage
- directly into animation cels link animation cels as not everyone is aware of what is a cel
- Sure. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- ..and inspirational sketches inspirational feels more like a sugar coating rather than a formal tone
- He was also credited with adding Dopey's wiggling ears based on his own ability Who is Dopey? "on his ability" - who Anderson or Dopey? He was also credited with designing dwarf Dopey's wiggling ears
- Anderson could wiggle his own ears as seen in a 1984 Disney Family Album episode made about him (at the 6:40 mark). He didn't design the wiggling ears. He suggested the idea. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- use for saturated opaque colors. use of
- Anderson subsequently served as an art director for the animated segment on The Reluctant Dragon (1941), a project he least enjoyed Can we please remove this one line paragraph and merge with previous
- Sure. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
1943–1949: Package films, Song of the South
- By 1941, an animators' strike had lasted five weeks. The linked article says that the strike lasted four months, but is mentioned as five weeks. What is the relevance here with Anderson, was he part of the strike or organized it? What was the strike about, against whom was it?
- I'll change it to four months. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- While a federal mediator from the National Labor Relations Board negotiated with the two sides, Disney accepted an offer from Nelson Rockefeller, head of the Office of the Coordinator of Inter-American Affairs to make a goodwill trip to South America. Anderson was not invited as part of the trip, Not able to understand the relevance of this. If Anderson was not part of the trip, what is its relevance to the article and why mention it at all?
- As for the animators' strike, it's a fundamental part of Disney history, and it's said to have changed Disney's political views. The goodwill trip to South America is the reason Saludos Amigos even exists, and Anderson worked on it. It also leads into the mention of the trip to Mexico for The Three Caballeros. It should stay there. I agree on your ideas for restructuring the sentences. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
- Anderson, along with animation director Wilfred Jackson, next worked on Song of the South (1946), to Anderson worked with animation director Wilfred Jackson on Song of the South (1946),
- were filmed and composited composited later
- through thumbnail sketches, to which he showed the animators asking for their agreement to sketches, which he showed to the animators asking for their comments
1950–1959: Cinderella, Disneyland, Sleeping Beauty
- "Bill was probably stronger or close..." Maintain uniformity in the layout of direct quotes. Only project significant quotes out
- soft pastel - no quotes required
- and Maleficent, wherein he a simple "and" would do, "wherein" actually refers to the scene here
1960–1966: One Hundred and One Dalmatians, The Jungle Book, death of Walt Disney
- Anderson learned about a television production studio—Hurrell Productions—was using Xerography to produce television ads featuring Disney characters to Anderson learned that Hurrell Productions, a television production studio, was using xerography to produce television ads featuring Disney characters
- with a Xerox machine to directly.... the Xerox process... was it a machine made by Xerox? use photocopier/xerography
- The assumption made is that it was a Xerox photocopier. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
1967–1978: The Aristocats, Robin Hood, Pete's Dragon
- He simplified the plot to focus more on the cats, what does it mean? focus on the cats?
- a "classic" tale - no double quotes required
- It means what it means. Anderson condensed the plot to make the cats the central protagonists. The story originally focused on the humans, with the cats as a subplot. Read The Aristocats article for a deeper history on the film's story development. I decided to focus solely on Anderson's involvement. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
1979–1993: Walt Disney Imagineering, later works
- WED Enterprises - same as in lead
Personal life and death
- Anderson met his wife Polly at the University of Washington and were married during the summer of 1934 Polly cannot be his wife before marriage! It has to be Anderson met Polly during his time at the UW and they were married
- You're right. PrinceArchelaus (talk) 18:10, 2 July 2024 (UTC) Y[reply]
Filmography
- Some notes say that he was credited as Kenneth Anderson, which is his name. He is normally credited as what, his name of "Ken Anderson"? Should be a note.
Images
- Only one single image with a limited license. Pass.
Refs
- Random ref check: 21, 23, 25, 31, 33, 74, 75 all seem good. All refs seem good. Filmography is unreferenced.
- Earwig picks up a few sites but is largely due to direct quotes. Pass.
Misc
- No ongoing edit war, broad and focused.
against the comment if you have addressed it, so that it can be tracked easily. Ping me once you are done. Thanks! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 08:42, 3 July 2024 (UTC)