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Reviewer: Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 03:12, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I will be reviewing the article. Comments will be posted within 12 hours.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 03:12, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Lead
"He is the son of 1994 NBA first overall draft pick Glenn Robinson." Try to avoid having wikileaks back-to-back. Maybe something like "He is the son of Glenn Robinson, the 1994 NBA first overall draft pick.""he committed to Michigan before" -> "he committed to Michigan University before"" three-star prospect" by whom?"he was a five-star top 20 prospect in the national class according to some" should be a comma have five-star. Also, by whom?" selectors, but did appear in" remove comma
- Background
"was a first-team All-area selection" what does this mean?- Typically all-area means All-city and surrounding area. Something like All-northwest Indiana.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:00, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"and Indiana State and Rivals.com rated him" -> "and Indiana State, and Rivals.com rated him""He and Mitch McGary had" who is Mitch McGary?- That sentence and the subsequent one provide context and his name is linked. What more do you want?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:56, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah, my bad. I didn't see it was linked.
"By the time McGary committed to Michigan in November 2011, Robinson had moved up to the national number 34 player ranking according to Rivals.com." unsourced- The reference for the subsequent sentence covers it. I don't think we need to put the same reference on two consecutive sentences.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:58, 23 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'll finish the rest once I get off work today.
- I apologize for the delay, but I don't really have a lot of extra time because of the Holidays. I will reply back by the end of the week.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 04:47, 25 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]- Once again, I apologize. I am finishing the review now.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:40, 31 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Background (part 2)
- "Robinson earned MVP honors with 33..." I suggest spelling out Mose Valuable Player (MVP), as people outside the sports world might not know what this means.
- "Although, he finished as the highest rated Indiana basketball player according to Rivals.com and the Indiana Basketball News state MVP,[26][2] he was not a McDonalds selectee." Is there any reason why he wasn't selected? If not, it's fine.
- Basically some selectors thought he was top 20 or top 24 and others did not. I don't know how many McDs selected last year, but he was outside the cutoff at the time of selection.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:51, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- College career
- "eight field goals in a November 12 91–54 victory against" the 12 91 part looks weird to me for some reason. I'd try to reword it to something like "eight field goals in a 91–54 victory on November 12"
- Personal
- "Robinson III's nickname is "Trey".[4][1]" -> "Robinson III's nickname is "Trey".[1][4]"
- Refs
- Reference #14 doesn't have a work or publisher
- External links
- "Robinson III at ESPN" and "Robinson III @ CBS Sports" Either change them all to "at" or all to "@".
Article looks good; once these are completed I will most likely pass the article.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
OK. Passed. Good work.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 02:24, 1 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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Glenn Robinson III
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- Result: Kept. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 18:30, 2 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
This article was promoted back in 2012-2013, and while it met the standard at that time, in the meantime Robinson has essentially played his entire professional career. As a result, the article has atrophied, with 2018 onward in particular being sorely lacking in depth and the personal life section turning into a mess. The lead as well needs a complete rewrite. Wizardman 13:42, 24 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- I have worked on late career, LEAD and personal sections.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:49, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Noting as a post-closure comment that I reviewed the changes and am satisfied so I'm fine with this being kept as a GA. Wizardman 23:57, 6 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
